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As you write a new donor appeal letter (or email), close your eyes and see the donor. See their smile, speak their name, blink at them, and make it real.
This process is very important, because writing and speaking directly to the donor, in a conversational tone, simply produces greater financial returns, not to mention that it’s more genuine.
You may be tempted to lapse into a story about a client and that’s okay, but tell the story as if the donor were sitting before you over a cup of coffee. Tell them how their gift made an impact on the client, and that such a positive impact would have been impossible without their support.
Yes, close your eyes and see the donor, like you are writing an old-fashioned letter to a friend. Tell your donor why they should give you their support, in the face of so many others asking, why your request is urgent, and what impact their gift will have. This is what we fundraisers call writing in the ‘donor’s voice.’
Your letter needs to emotionally move the donor in order for them to make a donation.
What the institutional voice sounds like:
The institutional voice usually goes something like this: “We’re great, we’ve been around for 40 years, no one does what we do, and you should support us just because we exist.” There’s a place for this voice, perhaps in your agency brochure, but an appeal letter is not well served by an institutional voice; it’s seen as formal and remote. I suggest that you relegate the facts about your agency to a side bar, or a sentence about your mission, along with a link to your web site.
Here are some tips for writing in the Donor’s Voice:
Think you’ve got it?
Then send me a draft of your upcoming appeal letter, written in the donor’s voice, for my personal review, and I’ll let you know what I think. If you’d like a sample appeal written in the donor’s voice, just send me an email.
Have you written an appeal in the donor’s voice? What was it like, and what difference did it make in your returns? Please let me know, leave your comments below. I welcome your input and questions.